Bloody Martinization of a small classic gem (1 Viewer)


when the violets roar at the sun

they've got us in the cage
ruined of grace and senses
and the heart roars like a lion
at what they've done to us.

A six line poem has one essential line for the meaning removed: "they'll set us free". The essential "their" cage is changed to "the" cage, depriving the poem of its indictment of the "they" of "society." The double function of title as both title and first lines is ruined by removal of "and" in line three which previously led the reader from title to the opening of the poem. The deliberate use of "for" in last line changed to "at" which distorts the intended double meaning of "for". So, like dropping an A-bomb on a perfect fragile flower. Good work. The heart roars like a lion at what has been done to this poem.

Yeah, it takes some gift, some doing to manage to screw up completely a six line poem.
It just dawned on me that maybe that was his purpose. If so, he should have published an
interlinear edition--Buk on one page and Martin on facing page--the better to appreciate
his talent.

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