The history of a tough motherfucker - best ending? (1 Viewer)

cirerita

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The first ending is from the WR version -identical to the mss- and the second one is from War All the Time.

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WAR.jpg
 
There's good and less good in both versions. I prefer the brevity of the line "It's then that the interviews end..." in the latter and the wording "he too knows it's bullshit" is superior to "he knows it's bullshit too." But overall, I think I like the more genuine "helps get the old catfood" Buk-style in the WR version. So, WR by a whisker. :rollfool:
 
I happen to agree with Purple.
Let's make a cut-up of the first lines from the revised version and the last 2 1/2 lines from the first.
 

Rekrab

Usually wrong.
Purple Stickpin nailed it. This may be one of the few cases where the editing improved the text, except deleting the cat food was a bad move.
 
Here it is:

It's about then that the interviews end
although I am proud sometimes when I see the pictures
later and there I am and there is the cat and we
are photographed together.

He too knows it's bullshit but it helps get the old
catfood...

Right?

If I were an editor, that's how I would have done it. But what the fuck do I know...

Right?
 

jordan

lothario speedwagon
i prefer the version published posthumously in 'come on in'

it's about then that the interviews cease
although i am proud in the pictures
and the photographs with the cat together

he too knows but somehow helps.
 
I don't see it in Come on in...but it is in Pleasures of the Damned. No doubt there's some subtle sarcasm I'm missing, as the version in Damned is not like yours.
 

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