The history of a tough motherfucker - best ending? (1 Viewer)

[cirerita]

The first ending is from the WR version -identical to the mss- and the second one is from War All the Time.

 

[Purple Stickpin]

There's good and less good in both versions. I prefer the brevity of the line "It's then that the interviews end..." in the latter and the wording "he too knows it's bullshit" is superior to "he knows it's bullshit too." But overall, I think I like the more genuine "helps get the old catfood" Buk-style in the WR version. So, WR by a whisker. :rollfool:

 

[roni]

I happen to agree with Purple.
Let's make a cut-up of the first lines from the revised version and the last 2 1/2 lines from the first.

 

[Hosh]

How can anyone cut the catfood line? Madness. WR version for sure.

 

[Rekrab]

Purple Stickpin nailed it. This may be one of the few cases where the editing improved the text, except deleting the cat food was a bad move.

 

[Purple Stickpin]

Here it is:

It's about then that the interviews end
although I am proud sometimes when I see the pictures
later and there I am and there is the cat and we
are photographed together.

He too knows it's bullshit but it helps get the old
catfood...

Right?

If I were an editor, that's how I would have done it. But what the fuck do I know...

Right?

 

[jordan]

i prefer the version published posthumously in 'come on in'

it's about then that the interviews cease
although i am proud in the pictures
and the photographs with the cat together

he too knows but somehow helps.

 

[Purple Stickpin]

I don't see it in Come on in...but it is in Pleasures of the Damned. No doubt there's some subtle sarcasm I'm missing, as the version in Damned is not like yours.

 

[mjp]

Two manuscript versions, three days apart.

(Larger versions of the images are in the database.)

 

[Pogue Mahone]

Weird, but awesome. Good detective work....